Fall Poem #1 (I know, what a creative title)
Leaves crunch underfoot
Fall's fireworks exploding
In the neon trees.
Fall Poem #2
The trees are changing
Some are green, like no one told them summer was over
And some are bare, as if they've been waiting for this all year.
Sky so blue above them
They glow in the chilly rays
Stained-glass fall leaves
I'm falling for fall!
I have a suggestion for a blog rule: NO PUTTING DOWN OTHERS' POEMS. It's mean and makes people feel bad about their writing. Agreed?
yes!!!
ReplyDeleteYes to that rule? I hope so!
ReplyDeleteYes! but if you want to give constructive crit. , say it nicely.
ReplyDeleteis neon two syllables?
ReplyDeleteI think so!
DeleteI love the phrase "falls fireworks exploding" but in the second peom, "I'm falling for fall", is a bit corny. Try something like: Autumn is amazing! or: I'm falling in love with fall! "I'm falling for fall" doesn't make much sense to me.
ReplyDeleteP.S Nice poems so far! keep posting!
P.P.S. That means you too Alex
P.P.P.S. I will start posting too.
It is a bit corny, but that phrase popped into my head and I couldn't resist!
Deleter u going to change it/
ReplyDeleteNah.
ReplyDeleteWHatever. It's ur poem anyway. I could change it but i won't.
ReplyDelete